Friday, March 17, 2006

Obessed (Part 2 )

Different Location. New Story. New Souls caught inbetween....something they can not attain.

He
gentley held her lean, slim waist with one hand as the other descended upon her soft creamy loved hands while she stood in awe. She could no longer comprehend anything at all until he leaned forward this time silently whispering his innocent painful words......

She wet her soft rosy lips and gentley placed a superficial smile on her face. But those eyes of hers, those eyes, no one could miss those eyes which seemed to tell you the story of the heartache, anguish and grief that man caused with but his presence alone......

Still and safe from her grasp, he stood this time with his lips aganist her cheek as she cried out the tears her heart no longer could imprison within his presence. She heard her laughter and all she could do was gentley raise her hands to her broken, bruised and ashamed heart. She silently uttered to him, "You probably broken so many hearts with your handsome face, but with me this time, you'll understand what's going to be the difference..... and its only when you look into my eyes you'll see......

He stood unmoving yet still beside his new prey and that being the lovely, bewitching her while she closed her eyes this time to open them and feel a new feeling unbelievable it may. He saw what she meant and was taken aback, how could those dark brown eyes gleaming the heartache and pain he caused all of a sudden create tears of blood the color of a welted rose cascading upon her face, was it because he was the one and only love she would every fully give her heart to and not hold back what she wanted to badly to give and recieve....

She now waited for his thoughts to escape his dry lips only to find that his eyes yielded his feelings of yet being innocent and unguilty of commiting those sins. While all along his latest victim her, was yet twirling her newly blow dried hair seemed to be in a far away place not listening to what he and she were in the middle of saying....

He and she glared at each other, his eyes stood cold hearted, pitiless, unemotional and numb while she closed her eyes to escape the truth she fought hard to hide, and now her eyes stood wanting to feel passion, tenderness, love and sought just a bit of responsiveness from......

All three stood waiting and though they all moved on from this unforgetable scene, here is how it was to be after all of that, he who sought to find she who loved his soul .. failed to find she the one whose stillness ignited his match and only seemed to harden and darken the edge with those eyes that unmasked everything they all tried to hide. She however died young with a broken heart that was abused by he, who then wanted and sought the passion that truthfully only she possessed towards him, no one else felt the same for him except she.... and what a shame her soul was lost in quakes of different men, but now she stood lost on the alter of shame for her family as the words of holy matrimony were said, though her smile was lighting up her face, she recalled the words her ears seemed to voice in her thoughts...."let's hope, he and she don't become me and he." Her heart began to chain its doors from any intruder it was to face.


the end to the story hope you enjoyed these words and i tell you i was really caught up in the story that of HE, SHE and HER as i was writing it, i am speechless at this people who i believe exist in our world, though are me and you one of them, only time will tell....but for now, i will end it here hoping you think of the story of she and he and maybe whats their to be..... i thought this would be a nice continutation to the other story i began but this one is a new one i dont want to collide it with the previous so whats ur feedback on this new story written by me. :P

6 Comments:

Blogger Ms. Sarah said...

good work ;)

5:30 PM  
Blogger Jacqui said...

it's confusing people, re-read it urself :r So that you can fix it.

5:32 PM  
Blogger Sou said...

Erm...

It was really well written, but I didn't really get it...

5:34 PM  
Blogger Your Battlefield said...

swair: thanks :) i dont know what else to say...

jacqui:its confusing because i meant for it to be confusing if you read with some concentration and didnt skimp through you'd see that the characters are only 3 and they are italicized so i duno maybe ur right somehow its confusing, but i like it the way it is and i dont see what needs to be fixed...so what if your confused and others are, isnt everyone entitled to express their words, it doesnt matter to me that no one seems to understand but i like being misunderstood thanks though for ur comment and (am wondeirn)you sent both ur friends to comment on me its really nice of you :r thanks again :P

sou: thank you, i'm sorry u didnt get it but its supposed to be confusing so really the effect this story should have was make u think in a whirlpool of thoughts, again, their are 3 characters he, she and her i guess next time i shall use names....guessing thats what caused some confusion..:P thanks again, comment is really appreciated

5:44 PM  
Blogger Sou said...

Oh! More than one character!

Makes a little more sense now :)

1:13 AM  
Blogger Your Battlefield said...

jacqui: sorry about my error with skimp and skim, thanks for clearin it up :P

sou: :r i kind of mentioned it in the writing itself "All three stood waiting" so sorry for confusing u, i guess next time i decide to write something mentioning names would ease the confusion.

1:24 AM  

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