I Dont Want You Back...
Nothing. That was all she could comprehend from this encounter, speechless and ackward. She thought what was meant to be shall feel as was said to feel...but oh how shamefully she was wrong. Her actions, reactions and suspicions were now being projected against him.
Defined. Every sway from her body explained the truth to him. Full of suggestions and analytical realizations. Yet why did she still intrigue him when her soul was as dark as his shoes, and her lips were crimson roses waiting to be touched.
Attraction. She repels his eye contact by placing her attention on his gray, smooth button. He twitches his lips and struggles to communicate what's on his mind. Step forward, takes a step back...bleed....bruised smile and fine she suggests you take the lead.
Confused. Exactly with defeaning voices surrounding them, right and wrong is meaningless as their steps lead them towards the ....
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did you like the story...or was it horrible, confusing and terrible?:) anywhoo....these long days have identified the fake and truthful *r*e*n*s... now i understand that equation of ... will never equal ... because some people are just superifical......
posted by Your Battlefield at 5/29/2006 08:00:00 AM
5 Comments:
Hey nice work, anticipating more..... It has some sort of symmetry that appeals to me, but not as much as the content.
I ditto your last line......
Just like Jitterbug, I would like to read more! Seems like this piece is a small part of a larger story! Seems very compelling and intreaging!
7beebti i looooved it
reminded me of something....
The image, the words, the image painted by the words all tasted of desolation. Pretty and bitter with a yearning for better, I could tastefeelsmell that scene. I liked it.
jitterbug:
thank you...am filled with glee that a reader whats more...that in its own way is heart-warming...and keeps me going and i actually thought it would be confusing for people to understand but you proved me wrong...am glad the content and the symmetry of my writing appeals to you...wallah i appreciate these words you said they mean so much to me...they are gems and about the last line you ditto...by experience i've learned to what measures people..can be supericial its so sad but a truthful devastation...
the stallion:
its wonderful to know a reader wants more... and well no this piece is not a small piece of a larger story its all alone..but if i have the time ...i might create and make it a larger story but then i would know that it wont be the same if i were to leave it single and alone...becuz it might ruin the effect...but we'll see...glad that it intrigued you ;)
vintage:
explain dark...how or what gives you that reflection that i am so or maybe so....and si your right its independent because being alone it has a flare rather than a short piece of a larger story.. adding more it might burn the flame :p get what i mean...small incidents percieve larger remnants..:P..and i can be dark yet also be shimmering bright...degrees...arent we all just thermometers...up is bright..hot and down is dark, cold and...:P i forgot where i was gonna lead that into anywhoo merci for the comment.
delicately realistic:
mashkoora it means alot to me that you loved it....will you excuse me and pardon be that...i would like to know what it reminds you of....do explain...curiousty killed the cat ;0)..welcome to me blog and hope you brighten the days with your presence ;)
snocone:
your thoughtful words are beautiful...they left me speechless...and glad someone see's the relation between the image and words....welcome to my blog and hope to see you more often :)
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To All of You....Thank for the kind warming words....merci ;D
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